Hey
Well thanks to all the feedback guys.

To those few that actually did help I just thought that I'd let you know that I changed the ending of the extract, and sent it in last night.
I'm too lazy to edit the deviation right now so sometime when I'm feeling up to it I might.
I will paste the change I made here though to make anybody reading this only have to read one thing- this journal rather than a journal and a deviation. Aren't I nice?
Here it is:
Are you Isabella Marie Russo? The one man asked as he looked down at her with a frown.
Yes, but- Isabella managed to get in before she was interrupted again.
Youre going to have to come with us. The other man said as he reached out and grabbed her wrist violently.
Who are you? And what do you want with me? Isabella demanded loudly as she struggled to wriggle from the mans tight grasp.
Thats for us to know and you to find out, if youre lucky. The first man said with an ominous laugh.
One more thing before I end this is that I broke down and bought a new paintbrush, so now there's no excuse for me not to paint that painting I've been meaning to do for ages- except more procrastination!
